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Shipwreck
Post subject: Small CorvettePosted: July 9th, 2019, 4:05 am
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First try here in SB, a small coastal corvette.

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Post subject: Re: Small CorvettePosted: July 9th, 2019, 12:35 pm
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This is a fantastic first drawing. You have a properly sized combat suite, which can be rare in a first drawing. I look forward to seeing more.

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Post subject: Re: Small CorvettePosted: July 9th, 2019, 1:49 pm
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TimothyC wrote: *
This is a fantastic first drawing. You have a properly sized combat suite, which can be rare in a first drawing. I look forward to seeing more.
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erik_t
Post subject: Re: Small CorvettePosted: July 9th, 2019, 4:32 pm
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Frankly, it could be a drawing of a real ship. I appreciate the attention to detail in the drop-down netting around the (presumably) 40mm, including mundane components like navigation lights and ESM omnis, shading on the 76mm, and the very nice SVTT (I assume this is a new parts sheet part I hadn't seen yet).

A few areas for improvement:
  • Hull shading would be nice to see.
  • The Exocet launchers have some JPEG artifacts around them.
  • Consider doing a top view "cartoon" for your own purposes to consider whether everything will fit. As drawn, your deckhouse would need to be very narrow (or the ship quite beamy) to fit a RHIB on the main deck and still provide sufficient clearance inboard to move forward and aft. 12'/3.5m might be a reasonable minimum on either side of the deckhouse, if the ship is symmetrical. Probably you make the superstructure "wasp-waisted", so that it might be wider forward and aft of the boat.
  • Probably you would not have fixed railings outboard of the liferaft container.
  • The 20mm gun is an old part, and we have better renderings now (I think).
  • The mooring chocks and bitts don't make a ton of sense. What is necessary for a ship of any specific size is outside my body of knowledge, but at the very very least you need a chock and bitt each forward and aft. This PDF has all you could ever want to know about mooring, I suspect.
I look forward to seeing more of your work.


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Hood
Post subject: Re: Small CorvettePosted: July 9th, 2019, 6:27 pm
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Welcome aboard, this is an impressive entrance.

The only styling nitpick is the lack of shading underneath the bridge wing and deck extension around the twin 40mm mount.

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Miklania
Post subject: Re: Small CorvettePosted: July 10th, 2019, 1:34 am
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Looks great! The sensible equipment fit is very impressive. My suggestions are to use a newer anti-fouling color on the hull, add more hull shading, and reverse the shading on the 40mm mount (currently the dark backside is facing the light source).

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Post subject: Re: Small CorvettePosted: July 10th, 2019, 11:21 pm
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Thanks for all the advised that would help me to refine my skills in drawing here in SB.


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sebu
Post subject: Re: Small CorvettePosted: July 15th, 2019, 8:09 am
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A very nice and solid start; welcome aboard!


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Shipwreck
Post subject: Re: Small CorvettePosted: July 16th, 2019, 3:31 am
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sebu wrote: *
A very nice and solid start; welcome aboard!
Thank you sir :)


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